Friday, 16 September 2016

Hitchiker

2 comments:

  1. Some good dialogue here George. You have however forgotten to put in transitions at the end of scenes, and also you need to re-read your work at the end to correct errors. Apostrophes are used incorrectly and there are a lot of spelling mistakes. I can teach you about apostrophes.

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  2. Some good dialogue here George. You have however forgotten to put in transitions at the end of scenes, and also you need to re-read your work at the end to correct errors. Apostrophes are used incorrectly and there are a lot of spelling mistakes. I can teach you about apostrophes.

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